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already I can see your face, scowling at me,
     unaware that I am merely waiting for the
                       right moment to let go.

         I came into this room on my own,
but now there are three of
                us, here, and now there is tension.
standing close, shoulder
                     to shoulder with you and your arguments,
     ending up empty-handed and proud, with
nowhere to go now, when it is June and raining
                                                         every night.

                  once, I used to be able to trust you to
                     lay awake and count the stars,
      urging black holes into existence.

people ought not to change, you say,
              unaware than I am, at this very
                             minute, wishing I was someone else.
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Author's Comments

same deal as "a caelo usque ad centrum."
structure is good.
figured it out yet?

this one hasn't been edited as much yet. will be updated. I think it could be stronger. more direct.

EDIT 06.21.09:

changed some wording. I think I like the flow better now.
opinions?


EDIT 09.18.09:

fyi, “auribus teneo lupum” means "I hold a wolf by the ears."

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:iconb1gfan:
I love it - it's so personal and yet so universal :) I'll say it again: I loff it :D
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thanks for reading!
I appreciate your input. and your love for it.
I'm glad it reads as universal as well as personal - sometimes I worry that my stuff is too "me" and basically irrelevant crap to anyone else. so it's nice to know that sometimes I'm wrong.
thanks again.

--
"You know, you and I are like crystal. Most people are just glass. The world sings a note to them and they can't feel it. But we hum. But you have to be careful. You have to know when to stop humming, because crystal will shatter."
-Brian Hall
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Oh, it's totally my pleasure :)

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